Great, you have a new installment out. Waited for it. And such an epic one ^_^ I liked it a lot. It was utterly brilliant how you let the rage boil in Deniz thinking about Roman spilling their very dirty little secret to the last person on earth - even Deniz should know that no-one tells anything to that moron Mike, he just guesses right sometimes. And with Deniz being so subtle about his precious feelings it isn't hard to guess when he did something he would feel embarrassed about. I was waiting for him confronting Roman but you cruely left that for hopefully the next part ^_^
I loved your descriptions about Romans skating, I could see right in front of me. I couldn't even tell about those correctly in German, let alone English LOL
The way you let each of both thoughts wander off to the beginnings of their story and everything that happened between then and now was really a blast to read. You even made the mighty dull stuff running around in Deniz head sound fascinating because you are so very deceptive of all the little worries and ways of that baka. You really write like you were sitting in their minds. And that must take really a lot of imagination, knowing that there isn't really much going on in Deniz head.
I especially loved the moment after Romans fall to the ground when Deniz is at his site pawing him like he had any right to do that nowadays and Roman reflects on how Deniz still seemed to take for granted that Roman had any wish to be touched by him. And how annoyed he feels when he still let the touch of the guy get to him a little bit.
>>They're still in the I Hate You phase.<< Well, I don't need for them to come out of the 'phase' any time soon and I don't have anything against them never coming out of it. But that is just bitter me, I figure you still had a lot more planned for them and I am looking forward reading about it. Thank you both a lot for this great story ^__^.
By the way I wouldn't mind you post shorter parts more often. I found your story yesterday but was to tired reading all of it and that bugged me somehow. But that's just a suggestion. Again, well done! A wonderful teamwork of you both ^_^
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I liked it a lot. It was utterly brilliant how you let the rage boil in Deniz thinking about Roman spilling their very dirty little secret to the last person on earth - even Deniz should know that no-one tells anything to that moron Mike, he just guesses right sometimes. And with Deniz being so subtle about his precious feelings it isn't hard to guess when he did something he would feel embarrassed about. I was waiting for him confronting Roman but you cruely left that for hopefully the next part ^_^
I loved your descriptions about Romans skating, I could see right in front of me. I couldn't even tell about those correctly in German, let alone English LOL
The way you let each of both thoughts wander off to the beginnings of their story and everything that happened between then and now was really a blast to read. You even made the mighty dull stuff running around in Deniz head sound fascinating because you are so very deceptive of all the little worries and ways of that baka. You really write like you were sitting in their minds. And that must take really a lot of imagination, knowing that there isn't really much going on in Deniz head.
I especially loved the moment after Romans fall to the ground when Deniz is at his site pawing him like he had any right to do that nowadays and Roman reflects on how Deniz still seemed to take for granted that Roman had any wish to be touched by him. And how annoyed he feels when he still let the touch of the guy get to him a little bit.
>>They're still in the I Hate You phase.<< Well, I don't need for them to come out of the 'phase' any time soon and I don't have anything against them never coming out of it. But that is just bitter me, I figure you still had a lot more planned for them and I am looking forward reading about it. Thank you both a lot for this great story ^__^.
By the way I wouldn't mind you post shorter parts more often. I found your story yesterday but was to tired reading all of it and that bugged me somehow. But that's just a suggestion. Again, well done! A wonderful teamwork of you both ^_^
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